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forty-nine hours ago: we were pressing fingers together through frosted windowpanes, laughing at our reflections and sticking out tongues through frost-bitten teeth. we were gently whispering through the snow to kiss the glass, the intimacy of our own breath steaming down our throats never able to take the place of what we imagine it’d be like to breathe each other’s carbon dioxide.

thirty-five hours ago: we were running down fields clutching dandelions between our fingers, throwing our heads back to expose our neck to the whipping wind and trusting it not cut the slender expanse of it. we were tumbling down the grassy knolls and landing in the middle of the wheat, in the middle of the cerulean pond, in the middle of danger, in the middle of something we didn’t know how to tag and label.

twenty-three hours ago: we were diving into the belly of the sea and trying to filter out the saltwater with our tongues. we were curling up in coral and seaweed, anchored safely and floating recklessly. we were swimming towards one another but never reaching, fingers tense and stretched out but finding nothing but scales and silt under our nails. we laughed and said this emotion was like a game we couldn’t do anything but lose.

seventeen hours ago: we were flinging ourselves off of the roofs of buildings to see if this new feeling could make us fly. we were racing off cliff edges to see if this bubble of happiness would simply grab the wind with sturdy wings and float. we were arching bodies into the wind, shoulder blades kissing together as we plunged to earth, to water, to reality. we let gravity win this one, but we both agreed nothing was as exhilarating as that fall.

six hours ago: we were scrawling words over our arms, taking sharpie to record the poetry up our calves and curling around our thighs. we were saving our names for last, carving them on each other’s chest, touching two fingers to the skin and hoping with everything we had that the ink would bleed through the flesh and stain the heart. we both had to get dressed and leave but when we went our separate ways, we knew what was under the cotton and denim.
{"i've been roaming around, i was looking down at all i see
painting faces, building places i can't reach
you know that i could use somebody
you know that i could use somebody
someone like you and all you know and how you speak
countless lovers undercover of the streets"
--kings of leon

full title: this might be foolish, but it's beautiful
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:iconperidot-magelette:
peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2009
yup, this is beautiful.
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ElectroshockkSpazz Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:iconsocuteplz:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Beautiful :love:

I lovelovelove the last stanza/paragraph thingy.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
:heart::heart: thank youu
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Horsewild111 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2009
Beautiful indeed. Your writing is really good... I just love the intensity of the emotion you put into it.
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TheSnowInMyHand Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2009
Such a journey. Leaves one hoping, and remembering. Beautiful.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thank you
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Tisukiko Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2009
-sigh-

when i grow up, i wanna be as great as you.

{lol, that sounded childish-}
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
haha not childish at all -- it just means a lot.
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paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2009   Writer
jkldfjlajfl!!
so beautiful.
it makes me like the whole love idea a little more.
so good on you for making me a bit less of a horrible cynic since with words as beautiful as these, i can't help but have a bit more faith.
:heart:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2009
i'll remind you every single day to keep the faith :]
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:iconpaperheartsyndrome:
paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2009   Writer
good! i'll need the help. <3
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EternalFreedom Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2009
i ache for this.
:heart:
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Stolen-Marbles Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2009
i really do love this. The imagery is beautiful, the words, everything <3 love is described perfectly in that one sentece "this may be foolish but its beautiful"
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thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2009
thank you soso much :] i am so glad you enjoyed it.
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LgthAoshi14 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009
I love the time line you set up and the last stanza reminds me of my poem "pre winter thread" very brillant piece as always :heart: glad to see you're writing stronger than ever :hug:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009
aw, thank you soso much :cuddle:
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MeowPic Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
So cute! I really loved the ending.
It's one of those pieces that puts someone in your mind as you read it. :heart:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009
i am so glad you enjoyed it!
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iheldyoucloser Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009
i love the last stanza, and the title.
so amazing. :]
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009
thank you!
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PearlDropLove30 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009   Writer
wow. i am inspired by your beautiful words. they hold a burning spark of passion and skill that captivate me with their beauty. gorgeous work. :heart:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009
you are soso lovely -- thank you.
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PearlDropLove30 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009   Writer
You're welcome. You are amazing. You deserve the praise. :heart:
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BloodlustedInk Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009  Student Writer
Love this so much <3
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009
thank you!
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FireFairy102 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009
wow :heart:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009
loveyou!
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FireFairy102 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2009
^^
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KJ-Illustration Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
This is b e a u t i f u l :heart:

The way you intensified it over the parts; just amazingly done :)
Lovely job again, hon :heart: I love you for it; you keep my writers-soul inspired and alive in my sometimes busy (no-time-to-write) life :aww:

:huggle: ~ Kim
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009
you are just soso lovely.
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Scarlet-Inkxx Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this. It makes me want to go back to bed and curl up with my own love again.

Thank you for such a beautiful imagery filled write.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009
that means soso much to me -- thank you.
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Chai09 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009  Student
love the bit describing the winter and the sea. great imagery here!! love it
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009
thank you so much!
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Chai09 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2009  Student
no prob!!
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BlackStain Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009
*Is really inspired now and gets back to his own work with a heart full of ideas and ambition* =)
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009
aw, yay!
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KH-fan4life Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009
Wow...this is absolutely amazing.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009
thank you so much :}
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KH-fan4life Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2009
Np=)
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choirsoftheheavens Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009  Student Writer
three minutes ago: I read a beautiful piece that changed my whole person. I feel happy again.

(thanks.)
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009
you are such love -- you should know that.
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choirsoftheheavens Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2009  Student Writer
oh but I can't take your job! you're love. :D
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TheMockingBird Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2009
This is gorgeous. Simple and lovely and complex all at once.

Oh, and I love that song. Lol

The only thing I saw that you might want to check was this:

"roofs of building"

Should building in that phrase be plural? I just read a little off to me when I was wading through the loveliness of your words.

TMB
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