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if i'm the smoke in the middle
of the night then you're the fire
that's daring to breathe me into the
stars. and if i'm the steam fogging

up the windows, then you're
the ravaging fingers on sweat-
slicked flesh that's birthing it.
because neither of us are sweet

summer lullabies or gentle may
showers. no, we're nail-bitten
hips and saltwater-lips knocking
over vases and shoving devil-wing

shoulders into the wall. we're
pillaging hunger and insatiable greed,
sinning our way through poetic silence.
we're taking what we want and be

damned what stands in the way.
we're a wildfire tearing down
the forest, a hurricane ripping
the roofs off of the greater

metropolitan area. we're an
unnatural disaster, colliding in
an explosion of sparks and metal.
we're igniting the world until it burns

to the ground, we're wringing out the
ocean. we're standing in the middle
of the dust-hazed war zone we've
created and all we can notice is heat.
{"there's fire in your fingertips
flames in your touch
desire in your burning lips
can't get enough
today was a scorcher
but i'll go you one better
tonight when we get together
we're gonna make steam"
--ty herndon

full title: temptation never tasted so bittersweet.
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linxinpei Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012  Student Writer
For me my absolute favourite line was the last one: 'we're standing in the middle of the dust-hazed war zone we've created and all we can notice is heat'. It's dizzying, almost, the way the lines flow into one another, the repetition of 'we're'. No doubt it conveys the sensation of being utterly lost in one another. Really intense, suffocating yet freeing at the same time :love:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
that's always been a line that i've been fond of - i'm so glad that you like it too!
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Kassi-Kamira Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
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SkyBlueTattoo Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2010
I can't even find the words to describe how much I love this. :heart:
I tried to find one thing to point out that I liked the most, but I love it all so much. The imagery is intense, and somehow the rough thrill that the poem described still felt as smooth as silk as I read it.
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thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2010
oh, thankyousomuch.
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SkyBlueTattoo Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2010
You're very welcome.
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peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2009
you know this is sexy as hell, right?
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
well, i was going for that so :blush: i'm glad
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peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2009
and i was glad to read it again! nice thing about trying to prune my favourites is i get to read your best work again :)
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AlterEgo1629 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
The imagery in this is intense. It felt like a whirlwind and while reading I couldn't stop, had to keep going. Beautiful.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thank you soso much.
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:iconperidot-magelette:
peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2009
*jaw drops**fangirl scream* damn......... instant fave
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thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2009
ahaha, thank youu.
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IndieRockGirl13 Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
neither of us are sweet
summer lullabies or gentle may showers.
no, we're nail-bitten
hips and saltwater-lips knocking over vases and
shoving devil-wing shoulders into the wall

omg love those lines. such raw passion. delicious :heart:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2009
thank you soso much.
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:iconangelic-ins0mniac-xo:
told you i'd be back! XD

'we're wringing out the
ocean. we're standing in the middle
of the dust-hazed war zone we've
created and all we can notice is heat.'

i dont know how you do it, make my day, over and over, 'wringing out the ocean' i dont know why but it makes sense to me, everything you write makes sense, even when the jumble of words is blinded by tears and misty eyes because of its beauty. i get it.

its wonderful.

x x
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
i get all excited when i've seen you commented.
thank you soso much.
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:iconangelic-ins0mniac-xo:
lol yay!! that makes me feel special. so just to make you more excited i'll post more comments!

:hug:

x x
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Maybe-Im-Dreaming Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2009  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I really love the way you chose to format this piece. It makes it flow wonderfully.

You're amazing as always.:heart:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
:glomp: thank you, as always
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KJ-Illustration Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
"sinning our way through poetic silence." :love:

I totally love it! You can feel all the raw emotions coursing through them, so fueled and steaming. This is seriously hot ;) Wonderfull piece of writing! :+fav: ~ :hug:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
haha thank you, love
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pending-on-insanity Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2009
this is "hot." ;]
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2009
haha i am so glad you thought so :]
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Five-flowers Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2009
"sinning our way through poetic silence"
God, what a line. It's only a small part of a gorgeous piece though. Fantastic work.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2009
thank you soso much
:heart:
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xARiELA Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2009
This is amazing! I think you should know that reading your work is really inspiring for me :)
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2009
thank you so much!
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oneofthose-rachels Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2009
"metropolitan area. we're an
unnatural disaster, colliding in
an explosion of sparks and metal.
we're igniting the world until it burns"


:faint:

i adore how you've formatted this entire piece. :heart:

this takes my breath away.
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thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2009
:glomp: you are too nice to me, love
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FireFairy102 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2009
wowwowwow soso beautiful :heart:
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thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2009
:glomp: thankyou!
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FireFairy102 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2009
no problem ^^
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EternalFreedom Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2009
there's always beauty in chaos :heart:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2009
i agree :]
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EternalFreedom Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2009
:nod: :aww:
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ribcagerebel Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2009
lol. sry. my internet was slow. ended up clicking send three times.
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thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2009
not a worry
:heart::heart::heart:
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ribcagerebel Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2009
this piece reminds me of the violence that makes me happy to know love. :heart: and i love the fire in your words, doll.
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thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2009
:heart: thank you so much, love
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ribcagerebel Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2009
this piece reminds me of the violence that makes me happy to know love. :heart: and i love the fire in your words, doll.
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ribcagerebel Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2009
this piece reminds me of the violence that makes me happy to know love. :heart: and i love the fire in your words, doll.
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HallowMeor Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2009
You know what made you my favourite writer/poet? You actually spends time replying to literally everyone, which is so so cool. Ahh... your words never bore to amaze me as always.(^^)
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thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2009
i used to thank everyone for every fav/watch but i ran out of time for that.
but i made a vow i would always always always respond to all comments.
and to be honest, it's something i love to do, it's a highlight in my day.
and thank you :]
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TheSnowInMyHand Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2009
Powerful piece ... like walking out into the cold rain. Such a jump in thought, to fall into such words!

"no, we're nail-bitten
hips and saltwater-lips knocking
over vases and shoving devil-wing"


I read that and just had to pause, and let the words trickle over my tongue, like William Cohen's "...where it lies, as driftwood does in sand, to be rubbed by time, until it rots or shines..."

And i fell in love, just a little.

Then i went back to here ...

"because neither of us are sweet"

And grinned like an idiot. Because. Well, you know. Just because.

:heart::heart::heart:

Oh, and :+fav:. Bet you didn't see that coming. ;) :heart:
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thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2009
gah, i read that like five times and i'm grinning like an idiot.
and I DUN CARE WHO KNOWS IT.
:glomp:
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TheSnowInMyHand Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2009
:aww: :hug:

:heart:
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Love-Hate-Equinox Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
you make me smile a million miles wide.
always writing down the heart i try so hard to hide.
your beautiful and that's no lie.
but you got me wondering the hows and the whys.
singing my song and dancing my dance
shouting your words crazy and taking every chance.

thank you for the light you show me and the heart too.

not sure what would be if i didn't have you.


In short amazing as always, but better ever time.
Thanks a million <3 ^^.
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thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2009
DID YOU SERIOUSLY JUST WRITE ME THAT?
aksjdlkajdklajdfa.
that was the best thing everrr.
:heart:
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Slycinder Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2009
my god, its stunning how much this turns me on. but ive been there and the memory never fades. i love how youve captured it. im very glad i started watching you
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