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if i'm the smoke in the middle
of the night then you're the fire
that's daring to breathe me into the
stars. and if i'm the steam fogging

up the windows, then you're
the ravaging fingers on sweat-
slicked flesh that's birthing it.
because neither of us are sweet

summer lullabies or gentle may
showers. no, we're nail-bitten
hips and saltwater-lips knocking
over vases and shoving devil-wing

shoulders into the wall. we're
pillaging hunger and insatiable greed,
sinning our way through poetic silence.
we're taking what we want and be

damned what stands in the way.
we're a wildfire tearing down
the forest, a hurricane ripping
the roofs off of the greater

metropolitan area. we're an
unnatural disaster, colliding in
an explosion of sparks and metal.
we're igniting the world until it burns

to the ground, we're wringing out the
ocean. we're standing in the middle
of the dust-hazed war zone we've
created and all we can notice is heat.
{"there's fire in your fingertips
flames in your touch
desire in your burning lips
can't get enough
today was a scorcher
but i'll go you one better
tonight when we get together
we're gonna make steam"
--ty herndon

full title: temptation never tasted so bittersweet.
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linxinpei Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012  Student Writer
For me my absolute favourite line was the last one: 'we're standing in the middle of the dust-hazed war zone we've created and all we can notice is heat'. It's dizzying, almost, the way the lines flow into one another, the repetition of 'we're'. No doubt it conveys the sensation of being utterly lost in one another. Really intense, suffocating yet freeing at the same time :love:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
that's always been a line that i've been fond of - i'm so glad that you like it too!
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Kassi-Kamira Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
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SkyBlueTattoo Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2010
I can't even find the words to describe how much I love this. :heart:
I tried to find one thing to point out that I liked the most, but I love it all so much. The imagery is intense, and somehow the rough thrill that the poem described still felt as smooth as silk as I read it.
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thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2010
oh, thankyousomuch.
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SkyBlueTattoo Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2010
You're very welcome.
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peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2009
you know this is sexy as hell, right?
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
well, i was going for that so :blush: i'm glad
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peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2009
and i was glad to read it again! nice thing about trying to prune my favourites is i get to read your best work again :)
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AlterEgo1629 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
The imagery in this is intense. It felt like a whirlwind and while reading I couldn't stop, had to keep going. Beautiful.
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