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five years ago--
we were all elbows and sheltered self-esteems. we weren’t noticing each other except for bumping knees and walking into each other when walking around corners. we were nameless faces in the middle of the dance floor and hesitant hands touching. i was teaching you how to move gawky feet and a stiff spine, you were hitched-laughter fogging over my ear. we were wide eyes and gangly legs and fast music. we were bubble-gum-breath and coca-cola-fingers, breaking apart like nervous colts at the end of the song.

and all the parents said: ‘look, how sweet, she’s his first dance.’

two years ago--
we were all chewed-on-lips and wrung-together fingers. we were orbiting alone until we crashed blindly together. we were reintroducing with shaking hands and getting swung onto the dance floor with free-falling-breath. you were taller, faster, taking my old moves and spicing them with your own. you were flipping me over your arm and i was hovering my mouth over your collarbone. we were letting our lips get acquainted in the middle of fields, hands cupping faces and backs pressed to white trucks.

and all the parents said: ‘look, how sweet, he’s swept her off her feet.’

one and a half years ago--
we were meeting on cyber plateaus in the middle of the continent between us. we were shyly circling the history and laughing over shared tastes in humor. we were asking questions never asked with steamed breath during pressed-close dances. you were asking about my words, my job, my dreams. i was asking about your numbers, your uniform, your girl. we were gentle laughter and quiet excitement for the next summer.

and all the parents said: ‘look, how sweet, they’re building a friendship.’

one year ago--
we were quivering-hands and tripping-words-hello. we were sitting on truck beds outside small town bowling alleys and laughing down the river with the boat humming beneath your fingers. you were sitting in your parked white truck and i was leaning on the window. we were bright eyes and collared words. we were dancing under drunk stars in the shadow of her. we were trembling palms on arched backs and cheeks resting on broad shoulders. we were driving down dusty highways blinded with tears and the sun in the rearview mirror.

and all the parents said: ‘look, how sweet, she’s going to miss him.’

i am living in silence, i am drinking whiskey-laced-memories every night and racing down gravel roads until my lungs are collapsing and my veins are tangling together. i am painting your face in violent reds on my walls and bleaching my heart every morning to get rid of your stain. i am writhing when i think of her, i am dissecting your every word and every silence until i am in the middle of a bunch of syllables that don’t mean anything at all.

and the parents said nothing at all. nothing at all.
{"i said cowboy take me away
fly this girl as high as you can into the wild blue
set me free, oh, i pray, closer to heaven above
and closer to you, closer to you"
--dixie chicks

this one stung.

[and just to clarify: the guy in question in this piece is a really great guy. if anything hurt me, it's distance.]
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FerahW Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
Simply amazing. So touching, beautiful and well-written, I loved every part of it and had to add it to my favorites. You are absolutely incredible, keep up the good work! :)
NaomiJones Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2012
speechless people that have been through emotions that leave you feeling like this most likely see this in the same way as I do. I love the line 'bleaching my heart every morning to get rid of your stain'
favourite and love (:
thank you! i am really glad that you enjoyed it.
Alexandra-or-Emily Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2011  Student Writer
:( randomly reading and looking at crying pics and listening to some of my favorite country songs and I ended up listening to that song while reading it now the tears are falling again.
Its-Kezzzzzzzzzz Featured By Owner May 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I just happened to be listening to this song as I read this, and wow does it fit well.
moonsierra Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2011
Wow, touching. You inspired me to write a new poem :) IT reminds me of someone I love...and may never get over.
babeebee Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2011
Wooow. This is amazing, and really sad. Reminds me of something simiular that happened to be awhile ago.
One word...amazing. this is beautiful and dramatic. i luv it
mickmouse13 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I can't putt it any better than any of the other comments.. but wow.. a true story that leaves others who have nothing to do with you in tears. amazing story and great pacing. i know just how distance can be..
saphire456213 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Heartwrenching. Breathtaking. Beautiful.
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