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i saw you today and said ‘hey’
but what i meant was:

‘holyhell, you’re beautiful. you look like sunshine trapped in mason jars and fireflies stuck in moonbeams. you have a smile that punches straight to the spinal cord, did you know that? i just spent the last five seconds rebooting my heart, training my lungs how to breathe again. exhale, inhale. it should be simple but you’ve snarled it all in a giant mess. i’m unwinding the ball of yarn into a straight jacket and you’re as unaffected as the sea. i’d say i’m a boat but i’m hardly as sturdy. i’m a feather. it’s almost funny how little a chance i have of staying afloat. i’m soaked and matted and sinking into the undertow. and you’re just churning on and on and on.’

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i saw you today and said ‘how have you been?’
but what i meant was:

‘have you lost as much sleep as i have? i’ve spent 3256 hours trying to piece together the exact curves that make your eyes better than every other homo sapien out there and i’m still sitting at the start line with nothing but a frown and a blank sheet of paper. i’m tired. are you? i’m barely treading water here, carry the conversation a little, throw me a bone. great, look what you’re making me do, i’m mixing metaphors now. my thoughts are like those rubber balls that bounce everywhere except where you want them to go. i’m so busy chasing after them that i’m forgetting to focus on standing up straight. oh. shit. i think i need a cane.’

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i saw you today and said ‘i haven’t seen you in forever’
but what i meant was:

‘i’ve seen you, but it wasn’t with these eyes. you’ve been playing tag with my sanity, running from behind the corners of memories and diving into the dark pools of my insecurity. still waters run deep. hah. you’ve been on my most wanted list and i haven’t been able to pin you in a corner. you’ve slipped through the cracks and i’ve been chasing you with a moth-eaten butterfly net. if i could only catch you, waldo, i’d stick you in a box and get some peace of mind. but, no, you’re having too much fun tying me up in knots.’

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i saw you today and said ‘yeah, we should hang out sometime’
but what i meant was:

‘let’s get married. just kidding. but no, let’s fall in love. let’s fall out of ordinary. i think we could be something magical. i don’t know if i believe in magic but i believe in you. that has to mean something, right? you smell like the ocean and dust, that can’t be right but i can’t think of another way to describe it. no one smells like you do. pheromones? something like that, but you’ve got me hook, line and sinker. you’re like diet coke on summer days and clam chowder in the winter. so right it hurts. so perfect nothing could ever top it. except ginger ale and mac and cheese. but i imagine you’re like that too.’

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i saw you today and said ‘talk to you soon’
but what i meant was:

‘think of you soon. except in my mind soon means now. there is no lag, i’m already up and running with the next thought like olympic relays. trust me to not drop the baton. do you like to run? i sometimes run down my street in heels in the rain because it makes me feel like i’m in a black-and-white movie and you’re waiting for me at the railroad tracks. except i don’t live near a train station and even at night, flowers on my street are overbright. that’s okay, it’s just a thought. i’ll get a new one soon. like about how when you hugged me, my nerves seared against the backside of my skin and my tongue folded against the back of my throat. that’s a nice thought. i’ll run with it a while.’
{"neon heart day-glow eyes, a city lit by fireflies
they're advertising in the skies for people like us
and i miss you when you're not around
i'm getting ready to leave the ground
oh you look so beautiful tonight
in the city of blinding lights"
--U2

full title: if you keep getting under my skin, i'm going to have to shed it.

:iconkhaedin: drew [link] to accompany the piece.
go check it/her out. she is really brilliant.
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StarTrekPikachu Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I want to do this AWESOMESAUSER writing for my monologe for my drama class is that ok? thank you so much for writing this! :D
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StarTrekPikachu Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
that's me right there lol thanks so much! :D
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Swirl-spill Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
Frog, such beautiful writing~! :love:
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EyeMind15 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
Beautiful
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khaedin Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
jhdlasjdlahh omgosh i just went back to this (it still speaks to me so well. augh) and i noticed you linked to me! AHH! thank you! :D

hope you're happy and well, m'dear <3
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wtpineapple Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011
This is fantastic!<33
I'm really glad I stumbled upon your work.
I hope to see more.
:)
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saphire456213 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Its so fast and somewhat random and it feels like a runon sentence but it's not because there's definitely proper grammar and theres so much behind such simple words and ths piece is just fantastic.
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Chibi-Risu Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2010
hehe :heart:
I had a huge smile on my face while i was reading this, it's cute, and also funny. It's true! :giggle:

I love this, i really do!
I was looking through your poems, hoping to maybe find one about that feeling where you are kind lost and you really just don't know how you feel...
But instead i found this, and while it was not what i was looking for, it made me realize what i feel. I'm not lost anymore. Thank you :heart:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
aw, thank you soso much :heart:
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Chibi-Risu Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2010
you're welcome ^^
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MekaMouse Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2010  Student Writer
WAYYY too cute.
I looked that the picture that person drew... (I like you better. No offense to them.)
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
:heart: thank you, as always, darling.
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:iconmekamouse:
MekaMouse Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2010  Student Writer
welcome hun :heart:
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LullusHuo Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Sometimes, when I find the time, I like to stop by and read some of the ones I haven't yet.
And am always amazed. With your work the +fav button and myself become good chums.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2010
thank you :heart:
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lime-ade007 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2010
i don't know if i commented this before, i probably did, but it doesn't matter.
this is beautiful and it made me cry, because yet again, you've plucked out my feelings and laid them out in a way so beautiful it just doesn't feel real.
i haven't seen him again since he left, but i know that this is what will be happening to me when i do.
thank you:heart:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
oh, thank you so much!
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OceanLore Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2009  Student Photographer
Once again, no words. How do you describe something that can't be described? lol Though you are amazing at that! :hug: I adore the view point of this and how it translates what the writer really wants to say. :love:
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xXrainbowsky Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2009
I can't kind any words to describe how amazing this piece was, I can't find anything to express how unquestionably stunning that was. oh my.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
that means so much to me, thank you.
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peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2009
great idea behind this.

you have a smile that punches straight to the spinal cord, did you know that? i just spent the last five seconds rebooting my heart, training my lungs how to breathe again. exhale, inhale. it should be simple but you’ve snarled it all in a giant mess.

i’ve spent 3256 hours trying to piece together the exact curves that make your eyes better than every other homo sapien out there

so perfect nothing could ever top it. except ginger ale and mac and cheese. but i imagine you’re like that too.’

that’s a nice thought. i’ll run with it a while.’
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1995RunAway Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
i was going to write down some long praise but i can't think of anything good enough ;p

Great job! :dummy:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2009
oh, thank you :blush:
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1995RunAway Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
np :)
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OkeyGo Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2009
:heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart: fell in love with this :heart:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
oh thank you so much!
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Masono Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2009
whenever i read your work... whatever problems i'm in, i'm just sucked out of them. i'm honestly put in a place better than where i really am. no matter what the piece is about.

i relate so well, and it's just...amazing.
thank you.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
that means...that means the absolute world to me. thank you.
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Masono Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009
it is no problem at all. but, thank you.
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audio-heartradio Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2009
You found the core of what I need to say.
In this splendiferic piece.

" holyhell, you’re beautiful. you look like sunshine trapped in mason jars and fireflies stuck in moonbeams. you have a smile that punches straight to the spinal cord, did you know that? i just spent the last five seconds rebooting my heart, training my lungs how to breathe again. "
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thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2009
thank you soso much
:heart::heart:
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keiraBEE Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2009
that was so beautiful, it gave me shivers and made my heart melt at the same time. :heart:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
:heart::heart: thank you!
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
:heart::heart: thank you!
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EternalFreedom Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2009
i don’t know if i believe in magic but i believe in you.
win :heart:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
no, you are win
:heart:
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EternalFreedom Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2009
and you :heart:
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chocolatepuppy Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2009
This is brilliant. You're brilliant! How many times have I wanted to spill my own thoughts out like this? You're style is flawless.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
that means so much to me, thank you :]
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chocolatepuppy Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2009
you're welcome ^^
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hamster-features Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2009
This is just perfect.
i'm not good enough with words to let you know how much you made my evening by reading this.
Thank you =)
xxx
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thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2009
i can't tell you how much that means to me -- thank you
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SyrianKanachi Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2009
Oh my god. I just love the emotion in this.
I really do.
I can't really put it into proper words, but you've hit the nail on the head on the issue of teenage hormones.
Ugh.
Screws with your life. Your every thought.
And you've put that into 4 nice little passages with some comedy there.
GOD I'M WATCHING YOU NOW.

And I would fave the 4 or 5 things I've read from you, but I refuse to fave bomb, so I'm sorry about that.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
aww, thank you! :heart: that means soso much to me.
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SyrianKanachi Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2009
You are welcome.
Running into such a gifted artist that takes the time to reply to their comments is rare too, you're just one of a kind huh? ^^
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carleypelletier Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009
oh my god, i can't even form a conherent thought to tell you how much i adore this passage. i want to print it out and keep it in my pocket.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
askdja <--me. thank you soso much.
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summernightangel Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2009
once again, you're lovely :)
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