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because, boy, you know i’m looking for you, but i’m not sure i’ll ever find you.

i’m spending my days watching the different eyes that go by but they all have the wrong angle or the wrong shape or they’re a little too gray instead of the blue that i know you’ll have. there are too many creases where they’ve frowned too many times and are a touch too red from too much alcohol when i know you’ll have at least some idea of moderation. they’re all wrong because they’re not yours.

and i’m spending my nights listening to the different laughs riding the airwaves but they’re all the wrong pitch or on the wrong frequency or they’re a little too hoarse when i know you’ll be all smoke. they’re a little too strained because they don’t find life funny at all and they’re a little too loud to cover the cheap tongue wagging behind them when i know you’re nothing but genuine. they’re making my ears bleed listening to their imitations.

and boy, can’t you see i’m getting tired of flipping through all of copies? i’m waiting to hear you playing your guitar on a rooftop or drinking a whiskey-and-coke in the fog or buying a newspaper and sticking it in your back pocket for later. i’m trying to sniff you out, hunt you down, be patient and wait for you to take the bait.

but, oh, boy, can’t you see? i’m anything but patient.
i’m getting tired of waiting.
{"get me out of this place
'cause I'm stuck in a rut and I can't stomach the taste
my lungs are filling up with dust
I feel bruised and broken with no one left to trust"
--city and colour

all these boys are making me lose some faith in the gender.
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:iconth3chos3non3:
Th3Chos3nOn3 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Exactly what I'm waiting for...a boy like you described. And it does seem like forever till I find him. Beautiful. :heart:
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girlink Featured By Owner May 5, 2011  Student General Artist
:clap::clap: I love it, especially:
:bulletred:" you know i’m looking for you, but i’m not sure i’ll ever find you...
:bulletred:they’re all wrong because they’re not yours....
:bulletred: i’m spending my nights listening to the different laughs...
:bulletred:they’re making my ears bleed listening to their imitations...
:bulletred:and boy, can’t you see i’m getting tired of flipping through all of copies?...
:bulletred:i’m trying to sniff you out, hunt you down, be patient and wait for you to take the bait.

:bulletred:but, oh, boy, can’t you see? i’m anything but patient.
i’m getting tired of waiting.
:clap::clap::clap::clap::clap::clap::clap::clap::clap::clap:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner May 8, 2011
you are really sweet - thank you so much :heart:
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MekaMouse Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2010  Student Writer
Oh patience.
A virtue I doubt any human really has. XD
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19EarthtoBella83 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2009
Love it! I'm having one of my better days so I'll say I had one like him. Had. He got away.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
aw, thank you! :]
and you'll find better.
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:icon19earthtobella83:
19EarthtoBella83 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2009
Awww..ㅋㅋㅋ Nice nice of you. Love your writing. I'm echoing what someone else has already said, can I just fav your entire gallery? ^____^
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peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2009
can i just fave your entire gallery? this is just how i feel.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2009
i seriously want to learn more languages to learn how to say thank you more fully.
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peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2009
lol try googling a translator :-)
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Spurfy-Sora Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2009
You capture the exact feeling of it amazingly, particularly in that last line.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thank you so much!
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Darigaazthenewflame Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2009
dude that sounds like the me from 6 months ago...creepy...
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
>: D i am mistress of the creep.
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Darigaazthenewflame Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2009
lol
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:iconmari-maris:
mari-maris Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2009  Student Photographer
I surely relate to that.. and sometimes the idea of this one person that there is perfect for you scares me a little bit.. I mean.. there are 6 billion people in the world, how am I supposed to find this one? (seriously.. I did think about that LOL.. maybe he's in another continent.. how am I supposed to know? ;p)
Anyway, I liked it ^^
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
we are supposed to put up flyers and have try outs.
aaaand sift through the junk? i don't know, it's intimidating :P
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:iconmari-maris:
mari-maris Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2009  Student Photographer
I know lol.. but there's always the fear you'll settle down for less when there's so much more out there waiting for you and you don't even know it :p
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KJ-Illustration Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
... :heart:... wow...

It's almost like you pulled out my heart and soul and wrote it down in words... It's exactly how I feel, I'm waiting, looking, wondering, but my patience is surely tested. I know he's out there somewhere, but sometimes I wonder, a hint, please!?

Anyway, pardon my ramble, you hit me right on the spot with that, it's perfect! Incredibly strong yet again! :+fav: :love: and a :huggle: for you :aww:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
a hint would be a nice. a map, a damn smoke signal.
anythingg.
and thank you!
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KJ-Illustration Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
Indeed! Indeed! I so agree!
And you're welcome, hon! :heart:
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EternalFreedom Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2009
this :heart:!
and to top it off, city and colour. :heart:!
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
:heart:! to top your :heart:!
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EternalFreedom Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2009
:iconbigheartplz:
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Ildri Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009
Love love love it. <3
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thank you!
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PoochyChan Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009
Beautiful. :) The words hold a captivating beat, and genuine emotion in them, drawing me in with wide eyes until I'm finished reading.

This is another gorgeous poem about the unfaithfulness of some men, and I have to say amen, sister. :heart:
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
aw, love, thank you so much.
and ameeeeen.
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PoochyChan Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009
You're welcome.

And yes, yes indeed. :)
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Fridaythe13isLucky Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
amen, sister. Great job with this one ! :)
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
thank you so much!
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Fridaythe13isLucky Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
welcome :thumbsup: :)
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Wildfire222 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009
The piece itself is lovely as always :). And I believe in the soulmate principal. There is a guy out there who is just right for you, like two puzzel pices being put together. He'll find you. :)
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
i believe in it too :D
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TessBlack Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009  Student Photographer
It's better to be alone than to be stuck with someone who you aren't meant to be with, I think. But that's just me =) You'll see that one day you'll find him and maybe it'll be the day that you're least expecting to see him.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
i couldn't agree more :heart:
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tiannangel Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2009  Student General Artist
As always dear, your pieces are gorgeous, I can't stop reading them!

The faith will return, don't worry. I had almost completely given up hope on the male species during the middle of this year...
But a kiss certainly helped me regain that faith yesterday. ;D
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
aw, that's so awesome for you! i'm so happy :cuddle:
and i know, i just need to be reminded sometimes.
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hopeful-forgotten Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2009
I do that with the eyes and the laugh as well as voices... When I'm talking to my guy friends I'm just thinking about how his voice would sound... But seriously, you're description of the guy sounded exactly like mine... it reminded me of him again hahaha.

I can totally relate to all this story, every line made me wince because it's exactly like me... But I'm literally terrified of relationships... I run away lol.

Anyway, I love it. You always satisfy my cravings for good writing. :)
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
me tooo. i have such a phobia of commitment it's ridiculous D:
and thank you. soso much.
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pophipi Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
ooo I really love how you described the people in this. It painted quite the picture in my head :D

And nice concept too, I've never thought of it that way.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
aw, thank you so much!
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pophipi Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Your very welcome :)
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pophipi Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
ooo I really love how you described the people in this. It painted quite the picture in my head :D

And nice concept too, I've never thought of it that way.
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, I agree. Boys can be silly. If he's worth it, you won't have to look. You'll just sort of find each other and it'll happen. (Pff, I'm crazy for believing in this kind of magic, but it's possible. Anything goes in my world. ;) )
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
i believe that too :)
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RedShirtPunk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2009
I love this. I know exactly what you mean with every line.
I'm pretty close to just giving up the whole idea of ever finding that special girl that is supposedly out there , because I'm not sure she even really exists.
That being said I can't quiet shake the hope.
I imagine nothing else in the world is quiet like having someone hold you and knowing that you are the only person they want to be near.
Kinda the definition of a hopeless romantic I guess ;)
Anyway thanks very much and best of wishes for you, and HIM wherever he is...
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
i have some small faith left. i know he's there somewhere.
i'm sure your girl is out there too.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I'm of the opinion that there isn't much reason left to put faith in my gender :giggle: Maybe sometime in the future but sure as heck not now.

:heart: :love: :aww:

well, girl i've been waiting on rooftops with empty bottles of orange juice, wishing i could play guitar like a madman. but i can't. never have

and when you're looking my way on the subway a laugh is all i have to hide my stutters. it's so fake i know, but you're too beautiful and i never have my wits about me. i left those back home five years ago

so i'll keep waiting with my wrong-shade-of-brown eyes and empty dreamsiwishieverhad
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
i love you how respond with a poem all your own.
it's absolutely beautiful.
:heart:
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